As I mentioned, I’m taking part in the third Writer’s Platform Building Campaign, organized by Rachael Harrie.  To keep it interesting, she poses challenges throughout the campaign like so:

The first Campaigner Challenge is to write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “The door swung open…” These four words will be included in the word count.

If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), use the same beginning words and end with the words: “the door swung shut.” (also included in the word count)  For those who want an even greater challenge, make your story 200 words EXACTLY!

Here is my entry.  I used both the beginning and the ending prompts, and my story is 200 words EXACTLY.  Now I know why people enjoy writing flash fiction so much.  Very fun!  Here’s mine:

Gossamer Thread

The door swung open and I jumped.  I waited one full beat before I turned around to face him.

“You look fantastic,” he said.

I choked on my words, strode straight across the room and kissed him as if I had never kissed anybody before.   I kissed him as if I were swallowing the ocean.

“What’s this all about?” he laughed.

I still couldn’t speak, but pleaded silently with my eyes.  Please don’t make me say.  Luckily, he didn’t ask again, but resumed the kiss with even more force.  That kiss was a gossamer thread connecting me to my former life.  So long as we kept kissing, I could stay where I was safe.  I could be me again.  How long had it been?

He broke the kiss, gave me a squeeze and sat in the chair by the window.  He crossed his legs, draped his arms casually over the sides of the chair, and fixed me with a Delphian stare that must have taken him years to perfect.  “So?” he asked.  “Now what?”

I ran into the bathroom and threw up the entire contents of my lunch.  When I returned, the chair was empty and the door swung shut.

What do you think? If you like it, you can go to the thread and vote for me by “liking” it in this link.  I’m number 191. Now I’m going to go into the thread to read and “like” some others…

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  1. Very nice Julie. These entries have really left me wanting to read more. I’ll drop to like you too.

  2. Oh goodness. I am with Stacy – I definitely want to know more! Very intriguing!

  3. Wonderful, Julie.

    She’s pregnant. He’s not willing to stick around and be a father to the baby-to-be. She knew he would feel that way and didn’t want to “spill the beans.” Fate intervened and she tossed her cookies instead . . . right before the door swung shut on that chapter of her life.

  4. My fave so far! Going to like this one! christy

  5. I can’t believe he left, and I certainly want to know more! Lol! ; )

  6. I love this! I have been a fan reading your blog! Your writing works! Pulls us in and keeps us wanting more!

  7. Nice turn at the end.

  8. Did enjoy this. Made me want to kiss him too 🙂

  9. Love it! My guess is she’s pregnant, he doesn’t know, she’s not planning on telling him any time soon because she knows it’s not what he wants, and she just longs to go back to the way things were before she got herself in this predicament. When is the next installment? 🙂 (This is definitely one of my favorites so far too!)

  10. Wow, this is fantastic! You should have a go at writing for an older audience Julie. I’d love to hear more too.

    • As it is I’m having ADHD with my writing – I want to write everything, in every genre all at once! Then there’s the whole platform thing… It’s enough to make me want to give up and go take a nap – haha

  11. Oooo, very intriguing. I love how you handled the prompt by doing something completely unexpected. 🙂

  12. Nice job, Julie! I’m enjoying reading everyone’s post. I wanted to thank you for your kind words at Write On Con….”Thank you!”

  13. I like it a lot and now I want the back story. Nicely done. Mine is #72

  14. My first thought (like Susanna’s) is she’s pregnant – that, or she’s hiding something and just can’t bare to let him know.

    You did a great job in leaving the reader with many questions, which lets them pick their own journey.

    Good job on this!

  15. Oh my gosh! You totally drew me in and grossed me out right at the end. Loved your twist(ed) ending. You’re an evil genius!

    Great work, Julie! 🙂

  16. I kept thinking one or the other was a ghost, until the end I wasn’t sure which. And I STILL haven’t quite got it figured out.More, please? Nicely told!

  17. Hi Julie, great story with an evil twist. Good work. Denise

  18. Holly L'Oiseau (@Holly_LOiseau)

    I loved it! Very intense, and it sounds like the MC has a lot of complications in her life.

  19. I definitely thought she was pregnant. Great little twist. I enjoyed it 🙂 Mine is #138.

  20. Hi Julie! Well, I definitely want to read on! Great story!

  21. This tight little scene really has the potential to grow into a larger piece. I’m off now to like you on the challenge page.

  22. I so did not expect this ending! Is she pregnant? If so, what a cad!

  23. Okay, I didn’t get the pregnancy thing at all! But I got she’s a bit desperate to keep. It’s good

  24. Julie,

    I’m a judge for the first round of the challenge, and I wanted to let you know that you are moving on to stage two! There will be a semi-final (stage three) and a final (stage four).

    Congrats! And thank you for participating in the challenge.

    Thanks,
    Heidi

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